Federation Commander

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Section: Stinger II-class Fighter Note
Error: "Each Fusion Beam has two charge, and can combine it's two charges into a single shot of double range." should read "Each Fusion Beam has two charges, and can combine its two charges into a single shot of double range."

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Section: Lancer-class Destroyer fluff
Error: "The Lancer/Knight hulls remained in production throughout the General Wa, dispite being larghely replaced by the cheaper war destroyers." should read "The Lancer/Knight hulls remained in production throughout the General War, despite being largely replaced by the cheaper war destroyers." Note three typos

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Section: Hunter X-class Advanced Techology Frigate title
Error: "Techology" should read "Technology"

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Section: Hunter X fluff
Error: "was an new build, or a badly damaged survivor that was converted during repisrs" should read "was a new build, or a badly damaged survivor that was converted during repairs" Note two typos

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Page Number: 5
Section: Hunter X fluff
Error: "The close range damagethe" should read "The close range damage the"

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Page Number: 5
Section: Hunter X fluff
Error: " begin constructing (and verting...)" should read " begin constructing (and converting...)"

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Section: Buffalo Hunter-class War Destroyer fluff
Error: "The Hydrans were soundly defeasted" should read "The Hydrans were soundly defeated"

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Section: Knight-class Destroyer fluff
Error: "that a ship without it's own fighter support" should read "that a ship without its own fighter support"

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Page Number: 6
Section: Cuirassier X-class Advanced Techology Frigate title
Error: "Techology" should read "Technology"

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Page Number: 6
Section: Cuirassier X-class Advanced Technology Frigate fluff
Error: "other half of the Hydran war destroyer class" should read "other half of the Hydran War Destroyer class"

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Page Number: 7
Section: Rhino Hunter-class War Destroyer fluff
Error: "Rhino Hunters were built in far samller numbers" should read "Rhino Hunters were built in far smaller numbers"

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Page Number: 7
Section: Rhino Hunter-class War Destroyer fluff
Error: "Rhino Hunters were built in far samller numbers" should read "Rhino Hunters were built in far smaller numbers"

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Page Number: 8
Section: Pegasus-class Light Cruiser fluff
Error: "After the Coalition virtually destroyed the Hydran Kingdo" should read "After the Coalition virtually destroyed the Hydran Kingdom"

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Section: Mohawk-class New Heavy Cruiser fluff
Error: "Like all 'new' hevy cruisers" should read "Like all 'new' heavy cruisers"

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Page Number: 17
Section: Anarchist-class D7H Battlecruiser fluff
Error: "the wepaons were completely replaced, nd" should read "the weapons were completely replaced, and" Note two typos

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Section: Anarchist-class D7H Battlecruiser fluff
Error: "are still convinced thathte Hydrans" should read "are still convinced that the Hydrans"

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Page Number: 17
Section: Anarchist-class D7H Battlecruiser fluff
Error: "and as a continueing insult to the Klignon Empire." should read "and as a continuing insult to the Klingon Empire." Note two typos

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Page Number: 19
Section: Liege-class Light Raiding Dreadnought fluff
Error: "dreadnought wit hthe same engines" should read "dreadnought with the same engines"

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Page Number: 20
Section: Overlord-class Heavy Battlecruiser fluff
Error: "wit hthe same engines" should read "with the same engines"

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Page Number: 20
Section: Overlord-class Heavy Battlecruiser fluff
Error: "in a desparate attempt by " should read "in a desperate attempt by "

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Page Number: 20
Section: Paladin-class Dreadnought fluff
Error: "Additional Palading were built" should read "Additional Paladins were built"

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Page Number: 21
Section: Regent-class Heavy Dreadnought fluff
Error: "built General War" should read "built during the General War"

Is this for the book three draft? (I haven't seen it yet but I know that Hydrans and carriers are not in the game so far.)

Steve Cole wrote:Is this for the book three draft? (I haven't seen it yet but I know that Hydrans and carriers are not in the game so far.)

This is the playtesting area of the forum so these are for book 3.

This subforum is just called ACTASF so if you use the 'new thread' search then you don't see the forum name it is part of. Its an issue with almost every piece of forum software I have used

Added to revision list and corrected.
Thanks,
TLT